First of all, I was really exciting and feel so fun about meeting a snow. Because that this highschool is located at the mountain, the snows more fell compared by other places. So, I played with my dormitory friends and we through the snowballs to eachother. HOEVER, yesterday, after the P.E class, I fell down at the place where had heap of snows, for three times in a row! It really hurted and I was wearing my indoorshoes so it was really cold. My foot and hands were not mine now. After that situation, I ran to the protective institution.
It took a lot of time to make my body warm. Teacher said that it was really dangerous. So wear my outdoor shoes when I am moving to other building. I really had a time to self-examinate and I promised with myself that I won't never wear my indoorshoes at the outside. It would be little tired but I will try my best to improve it. Because I needed to make my body warm, I had to skip my writing class, which I am studying with Ms. Palomo. I said to my class PA teacher and sisters who I study together.
At night, I talked with my dormitory friends about that situation and they said that they also slipped at the place where there are lots of snows. I should becareful and wear my outdoor shoes when I am moving to other building.
Happy new year everyone~!
Your essay is full of excitement! It is really fun to play with snow but as your class PA said, it is also very dangerous. You can break your leg or arm too easily. So be careful for the rest of the camp! In the essay, it would be better if you could address the thesis statement because it is not focused. There are some spelling errors, too. Yet I liked its vividness! Pay more attention to grammar, then your essay will improve a lot!
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